Thursday, 28 May 2015

Tynan

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2 comments:

  1. Well done Tynan,
    You have used some descriptive language features to describe a setting. I liked the simile 'I zoomed in like a shooting star'.
    Remember to go through and proof read your published work. You are missing vital punctuation (full stops) to help the audience read your writing.
    Mrs T

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  2. Well done Tynan,
    You have used some descriptive language features to describe a setting. I liked the simile 'I zoomed in like a shooting star'.
    Remember to go through and proof read your published work. You are missing vital punctuation (full stops) to help the audience read your writing.
    Mrs T

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